[REVIEW][Neutral][Player] Velveteen

[hyolee123]

supername: Velveteen

Alignment: In the grey between good and evil at this stage.

Type: Cyberneticly enhanced human (Cyborg for short)

Weakness: Being overwhelmed by crowds and Runs on batteries only capable of recharging in the Lunar light. Despite their huge everlasting selves they do run low at times, her right arm is still human generally weaker than the rest of her body.

Weapons: Bo-staff (mid/short range), Highly portable Sniper rifle (Long ranged), knife (Short ranged).

Other Equipment: Currently working on a motorbike for ease of transportation.

Abilities: Computer like memory, Teleportation abilities, Short distance telekinesis, highly adept hacking skills, skilled athlete, free running master, high endurance and high pain threshold.

Sidekick: Ienzo (Not that she'd like him to stick around that's for sure)

Team: N/A

Personality: Velveteen is actually pretty ruthless, she likes to believe after witnessing the death of loved ones she has no emotions what-so-ever. She convincingly lies to herself hiding the truth about her origins. She may kill to hide the pain, but always with a reason. Jailing the bad guys comes first unless a greater reason for their non-existence surfaces.

Real name: Aeria Gloris

Appearance: Aeria after the “upgrades” has bright neon blue visual lenses. Her left arm is completely cybernetic but usually is covered by a long sleeved jacket or hoodie. Her hair is layered and shoulder length with random spike like curls that may spring from her head, the hair covers the audio receivers that have replaced her ears. These receivers looks like headphones without a band to hold them up. Aeria has armoured spine that is also hidden by civilian clothing, Both legs from the knee down are robotic and also covered by thigh high boots or long pants.
In her Velveteen outfit, Battle modules are worn the armoured spine is bare and viewable and added talons to a belt of a similar material are added also.

Current residence: Copell an artistic city often filled with travellers who are into art and music,theatre and even cars. Sport over shadowed this of course but the art's industry was always buzzing. But at night the often summer atmosphere changed, it became darker as drunks wandered the streets, families slept and fog rolled down from the large mountain that towers above it.

Genre: Thriller, Action/adventure, drama, horror

Permissions: Velveteen is allowed to appear as a cameo in your comic/novel book thing. Please ask if you want her more involved. I'd be happy to include her. I'll help with drafting and brainstorming so you get a better idea of this character.

Notes: A sketch of Velveteen can be found here

[hyolee123]

Velveteen's Origin story~

Aeria and her Brother Arc were just orphans that lived on the streets of the light and happy city of Copell. An artistic city often filled with travellers who are into art and music, theatre and even cars. Sport over shadowed this of course but the art's industry was always buzzing along with tourism. At night the whole atmosphere changed as the city slept and fog rolled down from the large mountain that towers above it. Aeria and her Brother often steered clear of the slums so they camped out the back of the Copell Museum. They often worked hard for money and computers was the easiest way for them to do so. They became familiar with technology and came to know how it all worked. Between the both of them they came across multiple bumps and bruises on the streets. Often hordes of drunks and quite often thugs would beat upon the pair. Arc thought it was his duty to protect his little sister.

The siblings started their career when a common interest in computers surfaced. Often passing and entering a local I.T shop to check things out. The owner (Geoff) began to notice their presence more and more and eventually asked them if they were interested in computers. Soon after discovering their interest Geoff hired and trained the children out of his kindness. He was surprised to find out more of the lives of Arc and Aeria and the rate they learned at. They were gifted and he knew it but he could only teach so much.

As Geoff watched them come into work more and more beaten, his sorrow for these kids grew. He took out a loan from a gang to send them to a private school in the south sector of Copell. Here the children were heavily educated, fed and further educated in the field their "guardians" felt they need to excel in. This field was computer based, Arc and Aeria bumped up a few classes to almost more advanced than the teachers themselves. Before Aeria was 12 she was at the level of a second year uni student. Arc was in his third year. They both dropped out before they strain Geoff further. Even now mentally mature the siblings continued work racking in quite a bit in repairs and building Geoffs computer business.

They agreed to make life better for themselves back in school using technology no matter the costs. And as they were entering their teens the children drew up a master plan. They began to make the parts needed continuing to adapt them and change themselves for them. By the time Aeria was sixteen she was “complete” it was that night though, when it all turned wrong. A much higher classed gang almost mafia like came to “pay” the siblings a visit. Their boss back at the I.T cafe they worked at was behind on payments with the gang. That lead to threatens and eventually punishment. Aeria was still calibrating her own thoughts with the new parts leaving her vulnerable. As expected chairs flew and so did teeth Arc managed to hold his own. But more and more members of this rather large gang kept pouring into the newly found apartment of the siblings. They kept swiping and pounding the boy, pounding and stabbing. Until it was ended and no life response escaped Arcs mouth.

Aeria was still out in the next room, as the leader of the gang moved in to see this “project” the siblings claimed, he was intrigued.
“Bag this one. I want it.” He said as his henchmen walked to grab her. They moved her lifeless body to the back of a truck where they were going to preform who knows what on her. That was when she woke up. Opening the door to the back of the truck the gang found she wasn't there. Escape artist they asked themselves. They didn't know her enhancements were to protect her from them. Aeria had used excess energy to teleport away into the fog that envelopes the sleepy city.

Aeria now consisted of high tech mecha and her former fleshy human self. Able to tap into deep parts of her own mind and potentially match that of a made up mind powerful character. Aeria didn't know what to do with herself, automatic defences kept her safe. Aeria could shut those down and was often bored and did so. She could go the distance and her strength and reflexes increased too. Night time was her life, she watched the thugs and gangs grow and drunks numbers increased as the city plummeted into a depression. She ran tests walking down the street in the middle of the night how noticeable she was. It lead to small gangs being beaten until they saw daylight.

Aeria renamed herself becoming a vigilante when she took law into her own hands and ended up killing a madman who recently was released from jail. Little did she know new secret facilities in the mountains may be the cause of the change in the fog a change in the attitude of the people.

[Lowkey (Ithy)]

There are a couple of grammatical/logical errors in her history I'm sure you'll find if you try saying it out loud. It just won't come out right in a couple of places.

You've confused me a little with "Velveteen isn't real she is one with the fog a monster" and that bit about connecting with a made up character in her head? Couple of small logic-gaps.

I'm struggling with "your average orphan" -- who isn't picked up by social services; who somehow, despite being young and one of them female seem to make it out okay of being constantly just picked on by random strangers almost as though you just want their past to be painful and traumatic; who manage to make money with computers when as street urchins, where do they find the money / computers to learn how they work?; who despite not appearing to have ever gone to school build super advanced cybernetic enhancements for themselves. Not very average!

Would love to see more emotional reaction to the brother who loved her enough to die for her and repeatedly risk his life for her dying?

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[hyolee123]

I must agree Velveteen is the first character I made. This is very flawed and I was going to expand on her brother. Not as a separate profile because at this point I don't have any desire to resurrect him from the dead. Unless we can make profiles for officially deceased characters.

And obviously my standards of average is insanely mental xD probably what was just pouring out of my head. I can expand it quickly for you right now.

As (not so) average Orphans, Arc and Aeria came from the slums in Copell their family were probably killed when they were young and they've been alone ever since. As Copell is a modern city and the twins seeking safety would leave the slums for the higher ups they would come face to face with computers regularly. I'm thinking they came across someone who saw their interest and began to train them in the technology. He may of been the cause of the Mafia turning up at their door step, on some debt he never paid.

I would add more but UGH time D; I wish my internet wasn't so stubborn.

[jeneshisu]

Very diffrent from Ra. I like how she's a cyborg, it creates a whole new dimention you can add to her.

I remember you talking about her to me on msn at one point Her origin story sounds really sad but would probably be great fun to expand on.

[hyolee123]

Yes...expanding. That's what I was doing xD You reminded me. I shall do that whilst I wait for this paint to dry.